So, this is an interesting case. On November 1st, I decided to take an old story I had hidden away and rewrite it for NaNoWriMo. At the time, I had no idea that this
So much of this first chapter didn’t make it into the story. Most obvious is the Narrator. After this first chapter, I decided I wanted to make it a third person story instead, as aside from Heinlein stories, I’ve never really enjoyed a first person storytelling perspective. It is an artifact from the original idea I had that would become marches, and it didn’t even last until November 2nd. In addition, a lot of the story elements would be changed. For instance, the Silver Wyvern mentioned at the end of the Chapter was the original direction I had decided for Mirabelle, where she would become this sort of mix of her old life and new life.
The way the story moved through, it no longer made sense by the end. Mirabelle becomes more of something entirely new, not her clinging to her old life or the expected new life, but something more built on the ruins of both. It fit the character better, I think, in the end, and made me rather happy.
This chapter no longer fits in the story in almost anyway. The prose moved to be fully from Mirabelle’s perspective, which changes things a lot. The narrator in this story never shows up again, and for lack of a better term, this chapter just needed cut completely. The new introductory chapters jump straight in to introducing Mirabelle and her life before the Astier show up and change everything.